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Chris's 2013 NaPoMo
One bush by the walking path
smells like the woods
Standing close, caught in
the resin dusted cloud
Day camp and the summer
of shaded ground that gives,
overhanging leaf, metropolis
of interlocking twigs.
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Apr/1/2013, 12:17 pm
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Beautiful. Yay. Thank you. ESPECIALLY love "metropolis/of interlocking twigs."
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Apr/1/2013, 12:26 pm
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Thank you. So we're off and running!
Chris
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Apr/1/2013, 12:50 pm
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Chris,
I like the way the smell of "one bush" temporarily dislocates the N in time and space and sets off a chain reaction of memories. You are off and running, indeed!
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Apr/1/2013, 4:25 pm
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Thank you, Kat. The sense of smell is a time machine.
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meditation practice
Under this tree
with limbs folded
affix a sticky note
to the forehead, flank or scaled
fin belching brine with rotted fishes
bloating in...
What about the sticky note?
...upon which "thought" is written
A tap, a finger tip, a puff
a petite gesture
gleans a glimpse of blue
Ah, those gleanings thru the locusts...
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Apr/2/2013, 9:11 am
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Ah, Chris, this is a tricky poem. Tricky in the way the mind is tricky, so many twists and turns. I love the use of "a/the sticky note" and the way you've represented the different "creatures" within the human being. I also like the coupling of the contemporary (sticky note) with the age old (locusts), as another way of reminding us just where we are, how far we have and haven't come. Much food for "thought" in the way good poetry can be.
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Apr/2/2013, 10:36 am
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Why is the word "gleanings" so wonderful? I agree with Kat. Could not say it better. Intricately folded bit of time and poetry.
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Apr/2/2013, 2:46 pm
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Well thanks, you two. That's what I love about napomo, the improv and the freedom that comes with it.
Chris
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Apr/2/2013, 5:18 pm
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Star spangled or exotic
how do you take your heroes?
sacrificed, celebrated or martyred
Even the writers
ringing out and risen up
in degradation
Never mind the meanness
do not fondle the madness
like a filthy necrophiliac
Just here in the insincere
shadows of holograms
these warm companions.
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Apr/3/2013, 8:35 am
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Some great stuff here creating cognitive dissonance, like "risen up/in degradation." An offering to awaken the mind on a sunny, cold spring morning. Thank you!
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Apr/3/2013, 9:18 am
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Chris, you are getting to be one chatty cathy, loquacious like too. Keep it coming, sweet friend. I'm your huckleberry.
Tere
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Apr/3/2013, 7:10 pm
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OK tere, thanks for the encouragement
Chris
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Apr/3/2013, 7:46 pm
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Hey Chris,
Great topic for a poem, and I love the way it starts. You cook up a mean batch of sharp, tangy, tart. Just the way I like 'em.
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Apr/3/2013, 9:19 pm
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To Whom It May Concern,
The lambs wool vest I ordered
arrived with a hole in the front
it also happens
I requested too large a size.
I would have been compelled
to return the vest if it had arrived
in perfect condition,
but had it fit,
I'd have to return it anyway
due to the defect.
Now see here, Whom,
I think it only fair that
in addition to the cost of the vest,
you refund the cost of mailing it back
$17.00
Yours truly
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Apr/4/2013, 10:27 am
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You found a poem! And yeah, you gotta get your money back.
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Apr/4/2013, 10:37 am
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Yup, it was just sittin' there,
Chris
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Apr/4/2013, 3:36 pm
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This raft I rode the rapids on
was never so sleek
or well-knit as
I would have liked
but serviceable
a day off the clock
and nothing more to earn
make what you can
with what you have
another morning
and what comes after
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Apr/5/2013, 10:48 am
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Keep it coming, Chris.
Tere
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Apr/5/2013, 11:13 am
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Chris, your lambs wool vest poem is a hoot. I love the precise yet convoluted way the N explains the crux of the situation.
"another morning
and what comes after"
Somehow that ending feels precarious and raft-like. Perfect.
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Apr/5/2013, 1:34 pm
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Thank you both,
Chris
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Apr/5/2013, 6:35 pm
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Hi Chris,
I read the poem you posted yesterday before you withdrew it. It was sharp, biting, to the point. I think I understand why you removed it, not that I think you needed to, but this is just to say: Even if you don't repost it, you should count it as your poem for the day yesterday.
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Apr/7/2013, 7:22 am
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Not to worry about that last one, kat. I'm just frustrated with the quality of my writing.
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There's a prairie playing at the Metroplex
Which got me thinking of
America, wishing
I was Costa Rican, not
Canadian. See
how the fashion changes
and manifests in
me without my knowing
Why Costa Rica?
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Apr/7/2013, 9:10 am
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Keep it coming, Chris. Not yet time for thinking about what you're doing. Wait until May 1.
Tere
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Apr/7/2013, 11:10 am
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Chris, an answer to your poem's final question: I think it's the weather and less fear of (things) going south.
Tere is right. I'm enjoying these poems, these daily snapshots into your thinking and your life.
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Apr/8/2013, 6:08 am
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When in a mood of nettles and drawn curtains,
confer with a generous novel
Messy characters, confused or mistaken, entering
back alleys, sustaining blows to the head and landing a few
Follow the clues.
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Apr/8/2013, 10:11 am
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Excellent, Chris. I love it.
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Apr/8/2013, 10:26 am
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Thanks Kat
The wind-whipped sheets
anchored on both sides
by wooden pins, flown
like flags above a
neighbor's fence; what weather
caught the blackbird with its wings
blown wide, buffeted from curb to wire.
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Apr/9/2013, 1:47 pm
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Signs of spring, Chris? These lines are really fine at capturing the blackbird being lifted skyward:
. . .what weather
caught the blackbird with its wings
blown wide, buffeted from curb to wire.
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Apr/10/2013, 1:51 pm
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Hanged Girl
No sheltering tree
when the scent hounds of subtle
technology have tracked and splayed
you in the public square
infinitely multiplying iterations
everywhere. What is a door
when a blindness so profound
think of eyeless fish in caves
where the absence of light
is a permanent feature
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Apr/13/2013, 8:47 am
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Whoa, Chris! "Hanged Girl" reaches to the spot.
Tere
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Apr/13/2013, 11:04 am
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