Hypothetical https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/t1011 Runboard| Hypothetical en-us Fri, 29 Mar 2024 01:44:45 +0000 Fri, 29 Mar 2024 01:44:45 +0000 https://www.runboard.com/ rssfeeds_managingeditor@runboard.com (Runboard.com RSS feeds managing editor) rssfeeds_webmaster@runboard.com (Runboard.com RSS feeds webmaster) akBBS 60 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6752,from=rss#post6752https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6752,from=rss#post6752Thank you, jojo, what a thoughtful response. Welcome to dm. I'm looking forward to reading your work whenever you're ready to post. Chrisnondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Thu, 22 Jul 2010 13:34:12 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6750,from=rss#post6750https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6750,from=rss#post6750a part i enjoy best about this poem as a whole is that i got the sense of small spaces/containment from the structure. i also was thinking about the scattering of ashes being mimicked by the cohesive but line-fragmented thoughts... fragmented like a funeral program's typed out arrangement might be. by the time we get to "sealed envelope" i do feel like the poem exists in a very thin space, a thought that may become tangible as whispered instructions that only fill one page of correspondence paper. and great edit! very best, jojonondisclosed_email@example.com (mlle)Thu, 22 Jul 2010 12:52:18 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6744,from=rss#post6744https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6744,from=rss#post6744Thank you, Zak. Sometimes I write about myself and get lucky, others identify. Say, your brother and your "idealization" of him sound like a fine subject for a poem. Chrisnondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Wed, 21 Jul 2010 10:19:57 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6743,from=rss#post6743https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6743,from=rss#post6743Christine98, The cleverness of this poem is that our death is there in the itchy, irritating contemplation of the decisions that will be made, have to be made, at some point. I have this ideal of my older brother, maybe not a realistic one, but of this character who doesn't worry about these things. He goes fishing, he's been in real shooting war. Yet, your poem brings me down to crossing the t's and dotting the i's about very real questions that will come up. This poem has something deep about it; it is succinct, too. Thanks, Zak   nondisclosed_email@example.com (Zakzzz5)Wed, 21 Jul 2010 05:02:39 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6712,from=rss#post6712https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6712,from=rss#post6712Thanks Tere and Libra, The edit was just the last line; from Not a second thought, to, No second thoughts. Thanks again, Chrisnondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Sat, 17 Jul 2010 18:28:43 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6710,from=rss#post6710https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6710,from=rss#post6710What a nicely realized poem, and the second poem of yours I've read in the last several days that has struck me as whole, standing on its own, and set in relief. I am coming to it late so I too did not read the original. What truly makes the poem is the ellipsis with which it ends, a Dickinsonian touch. Nope. No glitches. Terenondisclosed_email@example.com (Terreson)Sat, 17 Jul 2010 14:13:30 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6688,from=rss#post6688https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6688,from=rss#post6688Oh, Chris, I love this (didn't see the original). Great gallows humor.nondisclosed_email@example.com (libramoon)Fri, 16 Jul 2010 16:24:53 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6668,from=rss#post6668https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6668,from=rss#post6668Thanks Auto, Glad you liked this. That third method; it is strange and creepy to contemplate, isn't it? Chrisnondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Wed, 14 Jul 2010 12:09:17 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6667,from=rss#post6667https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6667,from=rss#post6667Hi, Christine, The alliteration really adds to this poem, C, the Bs abd Ss are used so well and sound so good...there's careful polishing here. Oh, you don't need to change the poem, though it is strange and creepy to think that there would be a third big disposal method one could choose, dissolving it with chemicals. I also appreciated the witty style. Thanks for the posting, C, Autonondisclosed_email@example.com (pjouissance)Wed, 14 Jul 2010 02:03:38 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6651,from=rss#post6651https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6651,from=rss#post6651Thank you, Kat. I've incorporated your second suggestion...thinking about the first. Off to read the article. Thanks again. Chris ps: OK, I read the article. Might have to re-write the poem. It feels so retro now.nondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Mon, 12 Jul 2010 14:55:44 +0000 Re: Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6649,from=rss#post6649https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6649,from=rss#post6649Hi Chris, What a surprise this poem is! I like the tone and the way you have cast the "hypothetical" in such a way that the reader has no choice but to follow along. Sneaky but in a good way. Serious but in a way that is palatable. Good touch, this: "They'll need to know it's what you wanted" Two minor suggestions that aren't at all necessary: quickquicklquickly No second thought(s). I was put in mind of an article I saw linked to on another board: "Belgium's plan to wash its dead down the drain: Bodies would be dissolved in caustic solution... and flushed into the sewer" Read more: http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/worldnews/article-1292778/Belgium-considers-proposals-dissolve-bodies-flush-sewage-systems.html?ITO=1490#ixzz0tUrxaD1Q Oh no! More options. But I digress. Nicely done. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for posting.nondisclosed_email@example.com (Katlin)Mon, 12 Jul 2010 14:17:24 +0000 Hypotheticalhttps://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6647,from=rss#post6647https://bdelectablemnts.runboard.com/p6647,from=rss#post6647Burial or cremation? Think of it as a contingency plan. Just off to one side; sounds of bathers on the beach, coming through the window. Consider it glancingly: Burnt or buried? quicklyquicklyquickly write it down Followed by something festive, such as: "End service with, Satchmo At Symphony Hall, Sunny Side Of the Street." They'll need to know it's what you wanted Sealed envelope No second thoughts.nondisclosed_email@example.com (Christine98)Mon, 12 Jul 2010 11:55:47 +0000