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Rabid Girl


"She stuck her head in the oven, John, that's how Sylvia did it, she stuck her head in the !@#$ oven!"

Nikki's mad. Again. God may know why, but I sure as hell don't. Most likely, neither does Nikki. On instinct alone, she will explode. The allusions to Sylvia Plath, the implications of impending suicide, they are just a tease. Nikki does'nt plan on going anywhere. She want's to stay here, right next to me, and give me a tour of hell. The cheap tour at that.

"I can't explain EVERYTHING to you! It's like you don't get where I am coming from!"

 

Last week, while doing 70 on the thruway, Nikki tried to eject herself out of the car. I had to stop and restrain her. Cars slowed to watch as Nikki did her best to seem posessed. One actually stopped. "Let me go! Let me go!" The driver took one look and understood. He closed his lips tight, looked me in the eye, and nodded. Poor me. She wakes me at 4 a.m. to let me know that a vampire is in the tub, dying. She wakes me again a half hour later and says a man with a knife is at the window, biding his time. I feel like those lab mice stuck in the maze. Nikki wants to set a fire, than blame her father. Go, Nikki, Go.

"I know you want to sleep with her! Don't lie, I saw her stare!" Nikki is insecure around me. She has slept with half my friends and plans to sleep with the other half. In search of superiority, she plays this game of hers. Nikki is keeping score, but only Nikki is playing.

 

 "I had a scholarship waiting for me at Juliard, but my mother was so envious she turned it down !"

Nikki lies. All day, all night, she lies. It is amazing how many lies can fit into such a slight frame. I take it all in stride. The sex is good. Mostly. On the weekends we go shopping, and I uually keep her on a leash.The senior citizens stare, mouth agape. Nikki pretends to be offende by their gawks and hushed comments, though she loves it all, "it being motive for one of her epic tirades.

 

I can't complain.Much.This madness I am exposing myself to, this asylum I seem to have checked myself into, it keeps my mind busy and my heart heavy with something other then the fate of my newly-divided family.

I am only 18 anyhow. There is plenty of time for college and rehab is for the weak. Plenty of time.

"I think you use big words just to belittle me.I am going to spontaneously combust with all your pretension!"

She may, she may not.

Me, I am more of a self-immolation type .

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I have not had much time to write anything worthwile as of late, but I wanted to create something, so I just dipped into the distant past and did a quickie field note.

It is a lazy species of narrative, I confess.

alki
 
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It's a good read, A. I think you are a gifted
prose writer. This held my interest from start
to finish.

Chris
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Again a good read. Now I am invested. I want to see what you got, old and new. Seriously. What are your plans for what you have? I might have put more effort into Nikki's character.

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Hey,
 hank you for your comments. It is excruciatinly difficult for me to be objective when it comes to something I have written.

Yes, I could certainly develop the Nikki character a whole lot better. This was only the 4-5 time I read it since I wrote it yeasterday and I can see that Nikki needs some filling out. What a paradox it is, that such a foul person can be so charismatic to read/write.

I do not really have many older writings. Due to reasons that I cannot fully begin to understand, my output was fairly limited during the last decade of my life. Partly, I felt as if I did not have anything to say, or a a need to say it.

If Frost took the "road less traveled", I guess you could say I took the road that was'nt there.

It has been about 5-6 month now since I turned 30 and begun writing on a regular basis, experimenting, grasping for a foothold to build on, listening for my "voice", yadda-yadda-ya.

This is my motivation for being here, to "find my way". Being amongst honest and talented people is helping me to do that.

I am hoping to maybe send something to an e-zine eventually. It would be my first shot at being published, something I have secretely desired from youth. I have a few ideas, maybe one of them will come out ok.

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It comes through you are an instinctive writer. The hard part is developing, giving form to,the instinct.

Tere
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Hi A,

Sylvia Plath must be in the air as well as Rimbaud! emoticon

I, too, found ths to be an engaging read. After the first few paragraphs, I started wondering why the N was in this relationship with the "rabid girl," so I was glad you provided some insights. That added to my interest and gave the vignette another, unexpected layer.

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Thanks for he kind words, Kat. If I had put in a little more effort, I'd have posted this in the prose spectrum. Should have done it anyhow, this not really fitting into my idea of a "field note. ibged- :fleh

Rabid Girl/Nikki will be in a short-story I plan to write this weekend, so I will be filling her out somewhat.

alki

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Sure hope you do, Alki.

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