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Plastic Flowers


           Plastic Flowers


Little pot of plastic flowers
on the front porch table.
They look so realistic, two or three
different kinds and colors
complete with perfect little plastic
stems and thorns and leaves.
A genuine spray of these
would cost a pretty dime.
But you can tell that these aren’t real
because they’re growing dingy,
becoming dull, coated with grime,
neglected by time and dusty.
Not like the real ones, fresh and clean,
a rainbow of petals and growth and leaves
glowing with living, vibrant green.

You can always tell the real ones
because one day they aren’t there.



Copyright 2010 - Ponds and Lawns-New and Corrected Poems

(Originally from HARDWOOD-77 Poems, Gary B. Fitzgerald, c. 2008)
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Poem moved to the forum Chalkboard and Billboard, and for reasons already given. If you, in fact, want the critical comment on the poem let me know.

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You guys have got me completely confused now, which brings us back to our recent debate about critique vs. criticism. I WANT response to my poetry, positive or negative. I want people to say: ‘This poem works for me. I like this poem.’ or ‘This poem makes no sense. I hate this poem.’ I made a similar statement here in the comment thread of my poem ‘On Becoming One With the Universe’, which I can’t seem to find. I also encourage questions about my poems.

All I object to are the ‘re-writers’ (whom I have encountered on a number of sites…no names), those who say: “You should change the word ‘black’ to ‘blue’”, or “You should say ‘banana tree’ instead of ‘apple tree’”. Even William Logan and Joan Houlihan don’t try to rewrite a poem. They just say: I think this is good or I think this is bad and this is why. Does this make sense?

GBF
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