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Pink Pancake Place


Pink Pancake Place
 
A shanty of a place
surprise upon a side city street
painted sweet pink
serving pancakes steeped in sticky syrup
fruits, nuts, chocolate chunks
create your own ambrosia
June, a sweet, gangly girl named
June, in the bright, breezy month named
June -- sharing secret bliss
taste of Sun-kissed cloud and honey
 
 
 
October 10, 2011

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What a delightful little poem, Libra. Sun kissed indeed. Great opening line. June's portrait the kind that makes me want to set eyes on her.

I talk a lot about flamenco's cante jondo range of poetry, its deep song register. But in flamenco there are two other poetry ranges: cante intermedio, the middle range, and cante chico, the light range. Cante chico is often made up of songs for children and soothing lullabies. Poet is expected to be able to operate in all three registers.

Thinking on the poetry you post on our board my sense is that you can expressively operate in that full range. I am not sure I can. Even in my light verse you can detect a slight down turn in the smile.

Tere
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Thank you for such a delightful review.
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