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Our Frosty Moon Goddess Exclusive: Selene Speaks out in "Salon"


Well, it's not as if we keep score all year—
I mean, sure, my sister Eos has done more
men than I have but perky-winged Miss Dawn
has the advantage of the sun. You try sneaking
into caves after midnight looking for sleeping
shepherds—there's no available light in there
except for my torch and if I'm not careful,
instead of slipping under the robes with some
buffed up hunk of moon-candy, I find some gnarly
guy with lice in his hair and the breath
of a dying ram— I'm not into adding to the chalk
marks on my chariot with lays like that.
I got lucky with Endymion, you know? He was more
than a fallback guy for when I was in the mood
(which, as we know, with me is pretty often)
I miss him—and that's the truth. Even in his sleep
that man had all the moves. And it's hell being so
fertile—fifty-plus pregnancies and motherhood
will slow a gal down. Oh, and those three little girls
I had with Zeus? Cute, but they're the worst:
always nagging me to come out and play with the herd.
By the way, Note to Pan: Next time, ask.
Dude, did I need dozens of white oxen to take care of?
My address doesn't have to read "Mt. Olympus"
to earn me some respect. Upgrade the cape,
the headdress: it's diamonds and furs
when you get lucky enough to !@#$ a goddess.




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I've seen a bunch of your poems over the years. This is something a little different. In voice, syntax, playful tone, and line measure. And it all comes together, leads nicely up to a marvellous last line. One thing I wish you could work into the poem, what speaks to Selene's love of him, is that in Greek mythology Endymion is the first man to observe the movements of the moon. Get where I am going? Of course she would have had the hots for the first man to actually take note of her movements, phases, motions.

Good stuff. Smart stuff. I note how the poem balances itself on the two randy women, Selene and Eos. And who said women are not in competition?

Tere
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Slapping my forehead, yes, I do get where you are going and I thank you heartily for the suggestion. I agree—the poem needs that. Thank you!
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This is a trip -- I love it. The sassy tone is perfect throughout. This is one I'll come back to for sure!
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Totally loved this! I've been known to get a bit sassy with the gods myself lol so this almost sounded a bit like me (or maybe just my poetry) only much much better! Thank you!

D
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