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Re: Chris's 2013 NaPoMo


Powerful poem, Chris. I don't know the true story I assume it is based upon but don't need to.
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Thank you both.
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For Rose and Eli


Still sister and brother
although they are an antique pair
picking up a conversation grown cold
when they were in the thick of it

a companionable conversation
habits of thought that survived
the thinning out,

seashells in the backwash
of a tremendous wave.

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You paint a tender picture of the "antique pair" and then deliver an unexpected and oh-so-effective ending:

seashells in the backwash
of a tremendous wave.

I really like this one, Chris. You've done a good job capturing a heartbreaking mix of emotions.
   
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Leaves me wanting the back story. Is that fair?

Tere
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Thank you, Kat. No big back-story, Tere. Rose and Eli are my mother and [sign in to see URL] a sketch/impression of them; two of three remaining members of a family of seven,

Chris
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Best learn to live
in the peaks and troughs
an ocean of reverberations.
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Good way to express the interconnectedness of all things, Chris, and how that effects any one of us.
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