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The cat was polishing her skill,
her silver forks and knives
Her upraised paw just poised and
loose like that; a dangling
lash, a play of coil and snap
and flicked the lizard on his back

His belly flashing cobalt
blue careening cross the floor
and bouncing off the boards inert
as a shaken match

Then she, grown tired
of him, turned and trotted off

We picked his body up
and parked it in the sun

Until his breath returned
unstilled from the underworld
and pumped him through the grass

his cobalt mating marks: intact.

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I like this, Chris. Very much. Will return tomorrow when I'm not so tired to comment further.
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Hey Chris,

Wonderful description, both visually and aurally, of the cat being a cat. So many precise details that strike me as just right. I like that the cat's prey is not the stereotypical mouse and that the lizard does not die, as I had expected, at the end. I also enjoyed the subtle hints that this can be read metaphorically as a one kind of human "mating ritual" run amok. Perhaps you did not intend the latter, but it was there for me in the read. Thanks for posting this. Much enjoyed.
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hi Kat,

Thanks for the read and comments. It's good to know you approve of the details as I believe you are a cat person.

It's a real scene from a long time ago. I thought the lizard was dead too--and thought his survival was miraculous--really admired how he outsmarted the cat when it turned out
"he was only mostly dead." I can see how it might appear to be about human mating--not my intention but I can certainly see that,

Chris
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