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Impromptus


Impromptus

Frangipanis, yolks
fallen from a red sky

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Curve ball of head lights;
a distant lighthouse

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Storm swell, grey,
gauzy boats
in and out of view

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The cat, flushed inside,
social for the first time
in years

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Antennae exploring the sky;
hands from graves

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The tops of heads
in windows, black and white
of tvs on walls.

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Little islands. Rain,
insistent as a tide

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The neighbours argue, ferns
thrash against the wind

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Bats weave cloud with cloud,
a damp night clammer

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Fishing boats retreat,
spindly as spiders

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The downpipe’s anxious
torrent, an urge
to say everything at once

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From a different angle,
crayon smudges
on dark canvas

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Sambyfield,

I can see how poetry can be as diverse as painting. This is comparable to a bunch of quick sketches. If I spent more time on this doubtlessly I would begin to see the connections. But I come from the country of TCP where sometimes I'm warned off for trying to make sense of certain poems. Some poets are into exploration of other things, other than trying to develop coherence. At least coherence in the traditional sense. But I definitely see coherence here, some in the images, much in the manner of the language. Pristine, clear. Zak
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It is good to see a poem of yours, Sam.

Years ago, back in the 70s, I did a set of poems I called something like, 'Through the Dragonfly's View.' The idea was to pretend my eyes were like those of the insect's and that my vision was compound, constituting many little plates making up a composite of what I could see. This is the manner in which I approach your poem: many little plates making up a composite. It seems to me "From a different angle" pretty much states the poem's objective. And I think my favorite is this:

The cat, flushed inside,
social for the first time
in years

The image tickles me, makes me chuckle. And this too stops me:

Fishing boats retreat,
spindly as spiders

The association is unexpected and for some reason I can see what the image is looking to do, setting the fishing boats awkwardly on the water's surface. Your poems are rarely very far from the sea.

Tere
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Thanks, Tere and Zak, for such good readings. Wrote this about 4 months ago when visiting mum back in newcastle, always seem to get good writing done when i'm back home, lack of distractions and stress.

Glad especially that you like the social cat, Tere. She's a stuck up grumpy princess of animal.

sam
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