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quick the pirates are coming


the pirates the opirates swarm up from deeps
of sudden throat

one has three rows of teeth another
levitates from the mast foot hangs there over the ploughing ship
swells in a vicious solar flare exploding rains down
realigns at the poop then seastates forth big and menace

these pirates all of them in a wrack language
advance with cutlasses to where we are hollowed
heads out in our fearful caboozes

what is it with you pirates we ask

they shimmer then as though a startle had come across
we go with that
flinging turtle shells we rock-oxen swinge
the pirates in lurks there at the tabernacle they oyster out threats

we gather in like fry we eat up good all phosphorus and wave top

again the pirates have come up the thwarts
squidflooding their mouths at us

all the Last Day to come again in pink neptune arrays
you could bask in

reading wet books
till forever cracks
another
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oops

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This one seems not to be working most places. That's cool. Anyway, thought I'd see what you guys made of it, if anything.

Steve.
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Hi Steve,

Whoa! This reply function is strange.

the pirates the opirates swarm up from deeps
of sudden throat
(cool pun, opiate, pirate.)

one has three rows of teeth another
levitates from the mast foot hangs there over the ploughing ship
swells in a vicious solar flare exploding rains down
realigns at the poop then seastates forth big and menace

these pirates all of them in a wrack language
advance with cutlasses to where we are hollowed
heads out in our fearful caboozes
(haha! sounds like a family dinner. The relatives arrive and you sit back at the table and think, how am I gonna get through this...)

what is it with you pirates we ask

they shimmer then as though a startle had come across
we go with that
flinging turtle shells we rock-oxen swinge

(the object is to make hem unreal by turning them into poetry and funny poetry at that)

the pirates in lurks there at the tabernacle they oyster out threats

we gather in like fry we eat up good all phosphorus and wave top
(trying to be polite and good and stuff)

again the pirates have come up the thwarts
squidflooding their mouths at us
(hee hee)

all the Last Day to come again in pink neptune arrays
you could bask in

reading wet books
till forever cracks
another
(wow, next Christmas get out of town is my recommendation)

Of course what inspired the poem doesn't matter any more. Now we have a poem. And pink neptune arrays you could bask in sounds really great. I envision a Jules Verne ship in the arctic, the aurora going strong in the sky, the Captain handing out extra grog for the crew)

The squidflooding: it sounds like obfuscatory ink, but it's New Years', let's be compassionate here. They're just trying to say nice things, but the listener just sees ink clouds)

What I need to know is, what is a mast foot hanging there. Did a sailor die and it's part of him hanging like a mascot?

And why are the books wet? They could be dried by the fire.

I don't think this is langpo, Steve, there's too much play and emotion, and really it's a classic poem with a meta-metaphor.

Funny as !@#$, as Dave said about something else.

Pam
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Thanks, Pam. No, not really LangPo at all, I know. Christ it was a blast from the past seeing pjouissance appear here on runboard... But actually it could be LangPo if it was adjusted a little. There is LP in here. But it's early days for this one, I guess. I was a bit forward when I wrote it, and I see it needs more thought.

Cheers,

Steve.
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Feck, how nice to see all these people turning up, though...

Steve.

appy noo yar etcetric
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Wait, it can't be 10:51 p.m.!

It must be 4 a.m. and the moon a shinin'

How wonderful.

Happy New Year

Pam
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Feckin 04:05 and I am out of here.

Yappy ewe yaws tall.

Steve.
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Hey we're all about pirate fun! Love the ghost pirate poems & questions being thrown around...P is right on all counts!

Man this is a blast from the past!


Best,
JR
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The question is, what are the thwarts? I am feeling quite thwarted about this.

Auto
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Auto, I am feelign quite thwarted. Thankyou very much...so much so that I may have thwarts that need lanced by a medical professional..
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hahahaha!

I fear that we are bringing down the quality of the Board...perhaps Tere regrets already our presence...our hearts are good though...

Hee hee,

Auto
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Auto, I think we're very bad for this board & should be booted asap! Seriously, our poems may well cause a mutiny!!

As well as our lack of self regulation when it comes to pirates & exclamation points!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Feckin thwarts are seats situated across a boat...

And other things too, but seats and any transverse situating across...

Now I's really got to go. 04:49 now.

Regard thwarts as positions and fetches and others maybe...

!@#$, gotta goooooooooooooooo

Steve.
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Hey Steve, you better go
or goooooooooooooaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaall!
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I dunno Steve, Auto's family dinner is my Dick Cheney interview:

"squidflooding their mouths at us

what is it with you pirates we ask"

Yeah, there's a thwart that needs lancing.

Chris
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Well, a poem that brings into session the courtly Order of Misrule, and on the last day of one mediocre year, has got to be a riot of words. And it delightfully is. Of course what should concern the bejesus out of me is that it makes sense in a swaggering sort of way, makes me want to reply with my world famous imitation of a walrus with one tooth on fire. But I'll demure.

The poem is fun to read.

Tere



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quote:

ChrisD1 wrote:

I dunno Steve, Auto's family dinner is my Dick Cheney interview:

"squidflooding their mouths at us

what is it with you pirates we ask"

Yeah, there's a thwart that needs lancing.

Chris




Thanks, Chris. Good a way as any of telling me you think this is a waste of time. That's cool with me, and all feedback is always appreciated. I'm not being sarcastic or anything, I mean it. Everything helps with the future. Personally I've always found it utterly fascinating seeing Cheney or other Neocons being interviewed, but that's just my taste. I'm into the whole world-changing history of what came out of Leo Strauss etc. I know to some people that would be as tedious as watching a rat digest itself slowly.

Thanks again.

Steve.





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Steve,

No. I don't think it's a waste of time. How did I manage to convey that? So sorry for the misunderstanding, I didn't mean that at all.

Chris
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No worries at all, Chris. I was assuming from your comments. Could be interpreted differently, but I was trying to follow the usual thing of the words there as I got them. Honestly, no worry about it. I was glad of your crit. Sounded like what pjouissance might have liked might be something very tedious to you, but then I have no idea at all what you mean metaphorically by a Dick Cheney interview, or by 'yeah, there's a thwart that needs lancing'. It didn't sound like it was exactly your sort of thing. But, as I said, that's absolutely fine. In fact it's more than fine. I can't express how fine it is. I'm grateful for your comments. Seriously, I am.

Steve.

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I am so lame at reading, commenting on this kind of poem. Steve...my bad, not yours for sure. I've come back to it so many times today and every time I read it, I love the language, particularly all the sea language even more, the creative use of familiar words.

These are my favorite lines:

what is it with you pirates we ask

they shimmer then as though a startle had come across
we go with that
flinging turtle shells we rock-oxen swinge
the pirates in lurks there at the tabernacle they oyster out threats

we gather in like fry we eat up good all phosphorus and wave top


I think oyster out is masterful.

Pat

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Hi Steve,

On the second read through this poem, after having read the comments as well, I can see this as a kind of ars poetica. For LangPo? If so, then for a more humorous, sweeter sounding LangPo than I've often encountered. As an ars poetic, the poem works for me for two reasons: 1) theory (intention, purpose, whatever you want to call it) is embodied. Due to the way you've structured the poem, it comes across as dialectic rather than didactic. 2) I like that the N, slyly, sides with the "we" rather than with the pirates. Nobody, including the hoi polloi in the SoQ, likes to be talked down to by the pedantic, pissy, prissy in the avante-garde. I found your approach refreshingly refreshing. Keep it up, matey, and you'll be making more converts afore the next talk-like-a-pirate-day rolls around. Someone will holler out a warning, "The barbarians are coming!" And someone else will wave back, "Don't bother; they're here." emoticon
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Re: Barbarians. I was thinking of Cavafy's poem "Waiting for the Barbarians":

http://users.hol.gr/~barbanis/cavafy/barbarians.html

FYI: You know me as H (Halifax) from tcp. I also sometimes post places as indy. When I start posting again at tcp, I may sign up as Katlin. Get a clean start. Welcome to Delectable Mnts, btw. I'm glad you're here. This humble abode will never be the same. In a good way, I think. emoticon
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Pat and Katlin, thank you for your comments. No, it's not LangPo, it's just a poem. Pat, I'm glad you liked some of the language. I often get hammered for feckin with language like that. Katlin, I'm very glad you got with some of the poitical thing then. The vision of humanity here isn't supposed to be cold at all. It's just supposed to be a sort of startling vision after waking or something that maybe has relevance for what happens next. Maybe not. Just a cartoon Tarot in which anyone can read anything or nothing. Bollox probably.

Thanks very much for having a look and finding something in there that chimed slightly.

Steve.
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Steve,

It's almost impossible to not talk about what poetry is or isn't when reading this. You and Pam glossed over whether it was LangPo or not. You've talked about hitting a poem from multiple angles, approaches. The results are that this poem could mean a lot of things. Gobbledeegook (sic). Like with Joyce's Ulysseus (sic) and Finnegan's Wake. That is, until he provided a skeleton key, and people spent decades unraveling what it said or what it meant. In a sense, the others here have already built a skeleton key, so to speak.

Interesting to think about the limits of this type of writing (which I respect) in reference to your own comments about Terreson's poem. We're all one big happy family comparing notes. I enjoy the roll of the language. I enjoy the images. This is grand stuff (in its own way, which is something I repeat: a mantra of mine (for now)). I really can't add to any interpretation, other than to say yes to some of the positive notes of the others.

Thanks for posting. Zak

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the pirates the opirates swarm up from deeps
of sudden throat

one has three rows of teeth another
levitates from the mast foot hangs there over the ploughing ship
swells in a vicious solar flare exploding rains down
realigns at the poop then seastates forth big and menace

these pirates all of them in a wrack language
advance with cutlasses to where we are hollowed
heads out in our fearful caboozes

what is it with you pirates we ask

they shimmer then as though a startle had come across
we go with that
flinging turtle shells we rock-oxen swinge
the pirates in lurks there at the tabernacle they oyster out threats

we gather in like fry we eat up good all phosphorus and wave top

again the pirates have come up the thwarts
squidflooding their mouths at us

all the Last Day to come again in pink neptune arrays
you could bask in

reading wet books
till forever cracks
another



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Cheers, Zak. Interesting also to think about the limits of reading. I suggest not loooking for narrative or logic. Neither will be found here. I said somewhere else that for me this is just a thing of a tropic shore and how things change in the waves. I guess I often go back to Dali's idea of morphological echo, but please don't take that to mean Dali has any other relevance here. It's just intended to be a moment at or on or near the sea, with some dream stuff leaking through and being chased where it leads.

Thanks for reading.

Steve.
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