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Easter Sunday


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           Easter Sunday



Late Spring, still cold
this dark, metallic day.
The pond looks like quicksilver.
We’ve been expecting robins and roses
but still the light comes down solid
like steel, down
slow and hard from leaden gray.
Rain since not quite dawn, no sun;
not expected to soon return.
A puddled lawn, more topsoil,
even some driveway washed away.

We stood shivering in the sharp spring rain.
The cat watched us from the wood.
Stark and wet, leafless trees impaled
in earth like spikes of blackened iron.
We gathered at the Paschal grave,
the muddy soil easily turned
as we buried the poor baby rabbit.



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Good to see you around, Gary. This is one of your better poems I've seen. It reads flawlessly. And perfect for the day.

Tere
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Hi Gary,

As Tere says, it's good to see you. This poem has a field note feel to it: plain spoken with lots of details to connect the reader to the natural world. If Easter is here, can spring be far behind?

Hope you had a good day. Thanks for stopping by.
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I like this one too, Gary. The descriptions are palpable. Can't think of a thing I would change.

Chris
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There is, as with most of my poetry, a certain spiritual irony and questioning in this poem which appears to have been overlooked.

Maybe this one will grant some insight:


How reconcile this paradox,
this Creator who loves creation,
with the brutality and blood
that makes it turn,
the endless flow of life,
forms granted their existence
by the eating of each other,
the bewildered, starving young
still awaiting their dead mother?

How resolve this lack of compassion,
this cruelly designed summation
by the One who loves us all,
those lost to fire and fang and flood
or blown from nests in storms?

We will reason, for we are human,
and create our fine Religions
which our reason then deforms.



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Hint: review the symbols in 'Easter Sunday'.

Also note that shovels are made of steel.

Easter is about resurrection, no?

Resurrection is preceded by death, yes?

So...tell it to the baby rabbits...and 'possums...and mice...and humans, etc., etc.

(Is this, perhaps, a little too cynical?)

Sorry. That's what I write. Poetry, to me, is intended to make you THINK!


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Yeah...

poetry sucks, don't it?




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Gary,

Coming back to say, I got the "spiritual irony and questioning" in your first poem and which your second poem amplifies. The sense of "April is the cruelest month" came through to me.
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Thank you, Tere.

Thank you, Katlin.

Thank you Christine.

Actually, Katlin, the poem has more to do with Christ and God, or their absence, than it does with Tom Eliot.

Gary
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I sincerely hope that I didn’t give anyone the impression that my comment above was related to any comments about my poem. I was lashing out against Jesus and God Who have recently pissed me off!

I am angry, but not with you. Let’s just say that right now I'm learning the true meaning of ‘forsaken’. I have no personal beef with anyone here.

!@#$, I don’t even actually know anyone here. How could I be mad at you? :-D

I'm just mad at the world, right now. Aren't you?

Yet?
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What turned up as **** was meant to be s.h.i.t.
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Hi, Gary,

Judging from your comments, your theme is too ambitious for this short poem. It takes most of the poem to set the scene, and the fact that a rabbit is being buried comes as a shock, but not one that leads for me to any particular realization. Easter is cold and dreary and there's a burial going on; the result for me, until I read your explanation, is puzzlement. This is one of those times when I'd like to see the poem expanded and the theme developed into something at least twice as long. The writing's good—it just needs more room to speak to us.

Take care and thanks for the posting,

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Gary,

No, I didn't think you were mad at any of us, nor do I think any of us are mad at you. I'm not. A friend once said he was "spiritually bereft." He said it with a laugh, but he wasn't joking. Yeah, I know the feeling. At the risk of sounding platitudinous, I'm sorry that you are feeling that way. Feel free to say more, if you wish.

On a side note: We can't turn off the profanity filter on the board, but individual members can turn it off. Go to the control panel and click on change miscellaneous settings. Scroll down to profanity filter and turn it off. Then, when you come to the board and are signed it, !@#$ will be !@#$ and not ****.

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No hard feelings here, Gary. I still like the poem.

Chris
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pjouissance said:

"Judging from your comments, your theme is too ambitious for this short poem. It takes most of the poem to set the scene, and the fact that a rabbit is being buried comes as a shock, but not one that leads for me to any particular realization. Easter is cold and dreary and there's a burial going on; the result for me, until I read your explanation, is puzzlement. This is one of those times when I'd like to see the poem expanded and the theme developed into something at least twice as long. The writing's good—it just needs more room to speak to us."

So, were Lao tzu's themes too ambitious for his short poems?


"Brevity is the soul of wit."

 - William Shakespeare

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