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Impromptus
The week recedes-
each day measured
by one crisp shirt,
two trams, a coffee,
long office hours
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The tinny ring
of rugby on the radio;
post game, a player
accidentally drops
a fuckin
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High of 19, minimum
of 12; 26 dark chilies
hang, waiting to ripen
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Clouds gallop across
blue sky. Washing falls
from the clothes horse,
straddles aloe vera
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Woken by sex
four Sundays in a row;
new love downstairs
for Di, old enough
to be my grandmother
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A showy sunset;
gold everywhere
like temples
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Timezones away
oil approaches the bayou;
I think of my poet friend
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May/9/2010, 6:21 am
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Re: Impromptus
Well done, Sam. A work week caliberated, measured by normal events, even Sunday's sounds of sex. Second to last stanza, placement and timing, is perfect. And, yes, the horror has seeped into all time zones.
Tere
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May/9/2010, 1:11 pm
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Re: Impromptus
Hi Sam,
The first stanza captures the working life well. I was immediately taken back to the time when I had to take two busses to get to work. This series of impromptu stanzas creates a gestalt in which the whole is greater than the sum of the parts. Well done. I especially like the pentultimate stanza and the way space collapses in the final one.
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May/11/2010, 4:22 pm
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