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Full Strawberry Moon


Pretend the earth's a giant pie. Not hard to do
when scientists talk of its crust that the moon's pull
can cause to shift, the edges shatter. A crazy woman
I once knew baked dozens of pies by the light
of the moon. Flour, a cloud around her head, dusty
nebulae settling on the dark marble. Bushels of berries
stemmed, sliced, sugared down and heaped in crusts,
while tides tugged against the sands the way her brain
some days would churn within her skull. One day,
they found her, inert, in her chair, Little Susan
poking her mother's cheek to make her move or talk.
"Lunatic"— one neighbor said, after holes were drilled
in her head—no better off wandering our streets
than making pies—her mind in permanent eclipse.


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Whoa. It is not often I read a poem successfully built on the extended metaphor. Poem is clean. And sturdy. And tender. It took me by suprise.

Tere
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superb! And might i add a strong example of parataxis *wink*
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This got popped forward again thanks to Doc's noticing it, which is a blessing for me. It is graceful in every way-- there is not a single line or phrase of that extended metaphor that does not seem perfectly unspooled off a single skein
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looking over this again, and re-looking up parataxis, i rescind my previous statement. I got confused, you compare the moon to something very-unmoon-like but yes, the connection is clearly stated.
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