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murdered by degrees
Where were you
while I pled for relief,
murdered by degrees,
cut from all directions,
too weak, bleeding, to escape
in need of cradling aid that
never happened?
I learn to hide deep inside my mind
sleep to heal if only brokenly, grabbing
hope which ever lurks away and back.
I seem to lack; where were you when
it mattered?
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Jan/19/2018, 8:16 pm
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Re: murdered by degrees
Faith
Put your faith in Nature,
in the sea and stars and the magic
of the mind.
Put your faith in being,
in particles and thunderstorms
and time.
Put your faith in living
and how you always seem to
somehow stumble through.
Put your faith in you.
God did.
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Jan/20/2018, 11:44 pm
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What is poetry, it’s function internal and external?
to learn what I need to say, to express thoughts more simple or complex
than standard conversation
What people who would respond with feedback, not about the “goodness”
or artistic expression, but what questions does it bring to mind?
What internal screen scene does it suggest?
How do you feel while reading it?
What do you want to say in response?
What have you said (or do you feel like saying) with similar sentiment?
or, what are you working on that you would like deep feedback on?
Where were you
while I pled for relief,
murdered by degrees,
cut from all directions,
too weak, bleeding, to escape
in need of cradling aid that
never happened?
I learn to hide deep inside my mind
sleep to heal if only brokenly, grabbing
hope which ever lurks away and back.
I seem to lack; where were you when
it mattered?
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Jan/26/2018, 6:52 pm
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Re: murdered by degrees
This poem appears to express pain, anguish and betrayal. The fact that the word 'you' is not capitalized would indicate that the subject is not God but another person or maybe even life itself.
The poem posted in response was an attempt to provide solace and encouragement.
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Jan/28/2018, 3:44 pm
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Re: murdered by degrees
Gary
the virtue of clarity.
now, as you close, i would avoid telling the reader your massage (LOL)and Show me something.
yes?/No?
bernie
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Feb/12/2018, 9:48 pm
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Re: murdered by degrees
I am apparently missing the virtue of clarity in your question.
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Feb/14/2018, 9:36 pm
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