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On Becoming One With The Universe


      On Becoming One With The Universe



      Tree frog on the windowpane,
      lime-bright green on a sunny day
      but tonight, a small black spot in silhouette
      against the kitchen’s yellow light.
      I see my wife inside the kitchen
      making dinner,
      a skillet on the flame.

      A moth rests also on the window,
      another small dark shadow.
      A pirouette and suddenly the frog
      and the moth
      the same.




   Copyright 2008 - HARDWOOD-77 Poems, Gary B. Fitzgerald
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You bet, Gary. Exactly so. This is how we all become one with the universe. Robert Graves said of the mother-of-all-things-living that she is mother, lover, and layer-out.

Tere
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I like this poem too, Gary. It's simple, stark and matter-of-fact all at the same time.
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I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem.

I'm wondering if anyone connected with its philosophical point?
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Well, Gary, I have to throw the question back to you. Have you connected with anyone else's point of view on the board enough to comment on their philosophical point of view? You get what you give, man. Something for a philosopher to think about.

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quid pro quo, Tere, like you once said. I understand.

But, first off, I don't critique or review other people's poetry. Ever. Anywhere. I don't presume to be so qualified. I only write poems, old friend.

Secondly, I posted this poem here specifically because of your reply to me on Clattery Machinery regarding criticism on poetry forums. You said that 'Chalkboard and Billboard' at Delectable Mountains was a place where one could post a poem without being criticized.

Reckon not.



So, in the words of the great chief TEN BEERS: "That is all I have to say."



GBF
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quote:

GaryBFitzgerald wrote:

quid pro quo, Tere, like you once said. I understand.

But, first off, I don't critique or review other people's poetry. Ever. Anywhere. I don't presume to be so qualified. I only write poems, old friend.

Secondly, I posted this poem here specifically because of your reply to me on Clattery Machinery regarding criticism on poetry forums. You said that 'Chalkboard and Billboard' at Delectable Mountains was a place where one could post a poem without being criticized.

Reckon not.



So, in the words of the great chief TEN BEERS: "That is all I have to say."



GBF



Okay, Gary.

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Hi Gary,

quote:

I'm wondering if anyone connected with its philosophical point?



That it's a frog eat moth world? emoticon That all things are, ultimately, one?

quote:

But, first off, I don't critique or review other people's poetry. Ever. Anywhere. I don't presume to be so qualified.



There are a number of forums here where you can post and not be critiqued and also where you can comment without having to critique. For example, you can respond, in a conversational way, to the subject matter of something you have read. Maybe something like that would work for you?
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"That it's a frog eat moth world?"

LOL! That's funny. emoticon

Good one.

Actually, not far off. I was contrasting the frog's dinner with my wife inside the kitchen making dinner. I wasn't saying, per se, that we all are one but that humans are basically only animals. Most can acknowledge this intellectually yet they can not really accept it psychologically.

Here's a poem to that effect:



          Such disdain have we for Nature
          for it destroys with such abandon;
          the striking snake and dead-eyed shark,
          marauding wolf and mountain lion,
          those who kill without decision.

          So good that we, the pinnacle,
          the apex chosen, divinely made and special,
          are so much better than are they
          since we can murder without purpose
          and they but for some good reason.


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I printed out and then spent a fair amount of time tonight carefully reading Tere's observations here. I am working on a rather lengthy response.

Now they're gone!

Not fair!

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So, in response to Tere’s Cheshire cat reply, I say this:

Freud was right, we are but animals.

Goethe was right, we are unusual animals. As are the platypus and the octopus.


Tere said: “Truth be told I am singularly unimpressed by our species in general.”

Welcome, Tere, to misanthropy. Welcome, then, to poetry.


And so a poem:




       How reconcile this paradox,
       this Creator who loves creation,
       with the brutality and blood
       that makes it turn,
       this endless flow of life,
       forms granted their existence
       by the eating of each other,
       the bewildered, starving young
       still awaiting their dead mother?

       How resolve this lack of compassion,
       this cruelly designed summation
       by the One who loves us all,
       those lost to fire and fang and flood
       or blown from nests in storms?

       We will reason, for we are human,
       and create our fine Religions
       which our reason then deforms.




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Sorry about that, Gary. I confess to having difficulty figuring out the kind of responses you want. I decided to play it safe, not wanting to offend you again.

Tere
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Apparently I failed to log out last night. I guess that's just as well because now I don't have to log in. emoticon

Tere said:
"Sorry about that, Gary. I confess to having difficulty figuring out the kind of responses you want."

The responses I want are whatever the hell someone has to say, of course. I just don't need any poetry critiques. I didn't write poetry to stick it in my desk drawer, as they say, and I published it to share it. Love or hate it, no matter. I only want people to enjoy it if they do. But everyone wants to be an editor. Everyone wants have a poetry study group. In my opinion, duets are for singers and groups are for therapy. I'm just trying to have fun.

Tere said:
"I decided to play it safe, not wanting to offend you again."

I don't believe you ever have offended me, Tere. I saw a comment on another blog recently about how often tone and intent are misinterpreted on internet posts. They said that emoticons just weren't enough to differentiate between the many shades of mood and emotion. I agree, so as for me, try to picture my every post being sent with either a smile or a mischievous grin. Which of those, of course, is yours to figure out.
But I never post with a frown. If I feel that way, I don't even turn the computer on. I think sharing poetry and ideas like this is fun. If I don't feel like having fun, I don't go out to the dance hall.

And while I'm ranting, I might as well say that, in my experience, poetry blogs and poetry forums are the most humorless places I know of with the possible exception of funeral homes. People take things so seriously. Take a look at the world around us these days, folks. It's only poetry, after all.


GBF


 
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I’d like to clarify my comments, above, regarding critiques. I welcome and encourage REVIEWS of my poems, good or bad. “This poem sucks! It didn’t touch me. It’s stupid!” is just fine. “I think this is the best poem ever written.” is even better. emoticon

Like any poet I seek reaction, crave response, pro or con. I just don’t need the poem to be rewritten. It’s done, finished, final. Go write your own poems. If you see a goof…a misspelled word or grammatical inconsistency, shout it out, of course, but I don’t need any editorial suggestions. I have written exactly what I wanted to write and spent many an hour doing it. Take it or leave it. That’s not so wrong, is it?


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